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Some good stuff here. Some room for improvement. Comments:
-Thesis needs to express theme more. What is the revolution, reaction, reform. You develop those pieces in depth on the specific pages but you need to at least identify the pieces in the thesis.
-Make "previous" and "next" links more meaningful. "Back to" and "Next to"
-Make a link titled "Website Index" that links directly to foawebsiteproject.weebly.com
-Each page should have a meaningful title and topic sentence that expresses the main idea of the page
-Too texty. Only complete sentences should be thesis statement and page topic sentences. The rest of your writing should be phrases and bullets.
-Revolution page doesn't clearly identify the revolution (articles of confederation)
-Total democracy was in Athens not Rome. Rome was a republic.
-Typo: "Reation"
-What is the purpose of the maps on reform page? Captions needed for images.
-More visuals needed. This is related to "too texty". More meaningful use of images needed.
-Theme word definitions not needed. Replace with topic sentence that will imply how you understand the meaning of the theme words.
Pretty good on the pieces. Little confusing on the big ideas. Clarify. Overall, an acceptable draft. 43/50
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